Review of Short Story "Big Girls Don't Cry * Fergie" by Adam Shaw

I found this short story on a delightful online fiction website I'd never heard of before called Major 7th Magazine. For lovers of music and online fiction, it's a fun little adventure.

This story is by Adam Shaw. Like most stories in Major 7th Magazine, Shaw's story is based on a song of the writer's choosing. In this case, the writer chose "Big Girls Don't Cry" by Fergie.

Length: Short (3 minutes or less)

Genre: Somewhere between flash fiction and memoir, in my opinion

Stick around to read my review of "Big Girls Don't Cry * Fergie". Or, go here to read the story, and then come back to see if we agree!

General Impressions

Q. How's the hook?

Anyone who's ever been young and in love will appreciate the first sentence of this story, which basically asserts that the main character's college girlfriend broke up with him using a recording of the song "Big Girls Don't Cry" by Fergie.

I was immediately intrigued by the promise of the backstory leading to this juvenile behavior. 

Plus, the story teleported me back to a time when I, too, gleaned extreme personal meaning from pop music. Many of us had a phase in which we framed our life experiences with music, equating various popular songs with significant social and emotional life events.

Q. What made me want to keep reading this short story?

I wanted to know why the main character's girlfriend felt the need to play this song as a backdrop for the breakup. Call me nosy, but I really wanted to know. 

I was also curious to see how the writer would incorporate the lyrics from "Big Girls Don't Cry" into the story. He did a great job of it.

And that's the beauty of Major 7th Magazine. Writers select a song on which to base their short story. Readers choose which stories to read based on the curated "song" (story) list.

Q. Did I enjoy the characters?

I enjoyed the main character who got dumped, the ex-girlfriend who orchestrated the dumping, and the wife who, for years to come, chided him whenever Fergie's song popped up. 

Of those three, I loved the wife the most, probably because of the "full-bellied" laugh she issued when she first learned about the Fergie break-up incident. It depicted her confidence in herself and her relationship as well as her playful relationship with her husband.

Q. Did I like the writing style?

The matter-of-fact college recollections are refreshing. The main character reveals what his college love relationship really was to him: a "tangle of limbs," "cheap booze," and "shitty movies." 

In one paragraph, he's crying over the end of the relationship. In the next paragraph, he and his wife (especially his wife) are highly entertained by it.

In short, I love the light sentimentality and the big humor this story delivers in four short paragraphs.

Q. Was the ending satisfying?

Toward the end of the story, the main character alludes to his wife having an oncology appointment. No further details are supplied. But the implication that the wife has (or had) cancer draws a stark contrast between the nature of his relationships before and after college.

Some readers may be disappointed that the main character does not share more information about his wife's condition. But I think there's simplicity and beauty in keeping that part a mystery.

The story ends with the main character's daughter calling him "silly" for getting lost in an old memory. 

It's not dramatic, but it's a neat way to tie things up. 

Want to read "Big Girls Don't Cry * Fergie" by Adam Shaw in Major 7th Magazine? Here is the link one more time!

Review of Short Story "Grey Power" by Anne Wilkins

 I found this short story in a daily e-zine called Every Day Fiction.

It's by Anne Wilkins, a former lawyer, and much of it takes place in a courtroom.

Length: Short (5 minutes or less)

Genre: Let's call it suspenseful comedy

Stick around to read my review of "Grey Power." Or, go here to read the story, and then come back to see if we agree!

General Impressions

Q. How's the hook?

A. The first sentence begins, "In New Zealand..." 

And I was like, "Sold!"

I've never traveled to New Zealand, but I've heard wonderful things about it. Reading a story that takes place in New Zealand is far cheaper than traveling there, especially in this economy. What's more, you can get a little of your wanderlust satisfied by reading a story set in another land. (Based on the author's bio, she is actually from New Zealand.)

The story's setting is not the only aspect that hooked me. The first paragraph dives right into the subject matter, referring to a "candy assortment" of gangs in New Zealand. 

This told me two things:

1. The writer has a clever way of combining contrasting ideas to convey a thought. "Candy" and "gang" are not words I've ever read or heard in the same sentence before.
2.  The story involves intrigue (gangs) and can teach me something I know little about (gangs).

Q. What made me want to keep reading this short story?

A. The gang leader on trial is an octogenarian named Edith. I suppose that's why I think this is a comedy. You don't see many little old ladies defending themselves in court, and you definitely don't see them calling the shots in many gangs.

Edith's dialogue with her lawyer and the judge is charming and fun. She's the grandma many of us have seen and loved in sitcoms and movies: the one who does and says what she wants and doesn't give a fig what you think.

Edit may or may not be guilty of vigilante-type crimes ... but whether she's guilty or not, she has a coterie of elderly followers ready to aid and abet her.

You wouldn't say this story is "heartwarming." But it's definitely "empowering," in a comical sort of way. 

I basically kept reading because I was rooting for Edith.

Q. Did I enjoy the character?

I liked Edith even though she's a bit of a "trope." The author painted her with fairly vivid colors but didn't overwhelm me with details. In short, yes, I enjoyed the character because the author created her with flair ... and she's not overwhelming.

In fact, I wouldn't mind seeing a little more of Edith, maybe on TV. She could be a featured guest on a show like Monk, for example. (Too bad Betty White is not around for the role ... but there must be some other Edith-like actresses out there. Maybe Dame Judi Dench? Jane Fonda?)

Q. Did I like the writing style?

A. The writing flows and is easily digestible. The writer doesn't inundate the reader with flowery language. She uses shorter sentences and artfully placed, colorful descriptions here and there.

It's perfect for a quick read while you're standing in line at the bank or sitting in your car waiting for your kid's soccer practice to end. 

One sentence in this story confused me. It occurrs pretty close to the beginning and involves the word "scarper."

I admit I read that sentence several times before understanding it. Looking up the meaning of scarper in an online dictionary helped.

Of course, my not knowing the meaning of "scarper" is a me problem, not an author problem. And I'm very glad I learned a new word. Now I'm just waiting to hear someone else use it (probably within the next week) as if they've known it their whole life. Just to remind me that I don't know everything.

Q. Was the ending satisfying?

A. This is the kind of story where you find yourself rooting for the "bad guy." And while you're rooting, you're also snickering, because Edith is pretty dang funny.

The story could have ended a few other ways. I may have been satisfied with those endings, too. But as it is, I'm glad the writer chose a happy ending. It was appropriate for a comical, caricature-esque nature of this quick story.

Want to read "Grey Power" by Anne Wilkins in Every Day Fiction? Here is the link one more time!

Review of Short Story "Schrӧdinger Can’t Save My Grandmother" by Michelle Koubek

 Welcome to my first short story review at Online Fiction Review! I found this story on the e-zine Allegory.

The author of this fun online fiction piece is Michelle Koubek. 

Length: Short (a 5-minute read)

Genre: Speculative fiction

Stick around to read my review. Or, go here to read the story (and then come back to read my review to see if you agree!).

General Impressions 

This imaginative story held my interest throughout. The author created suspense while showcasing the backstory and developing an interesting main character.